! General comments
!
! 1) I was raised mostly using American grammar.  While I know some of the
! 	differences between American and British grammar (handling of collective
!	nouns, different spellings, different use of articles), I may miss a few
!	things, or inadvertently "correct" something that's correct in British.
!	I apologize in advance for all such occurrences.
! 2) In formal writing, a dash in a non-proportionally spaced font--which this
!	sentence includes for illustration--should consist of two hyphens without
!	any spaces.
! 3) The same lack of spaces apply for ellipses...which THIS sentence illustrates.
! 4) There is some disagreement about the use of spaces after periods and colons.
!	Almost universal is that there should be two after the period at the end of
!	a sentence (to allow for disambiguation from the use of a period in a
!	mid-sentence abbreviation).  Traditionally, a colon also dictates two spaces
!	after it, though I'm less certain why.  In any case, I have not altered this,
!	as this is a more contentious point than the dashes and ellipses.
!	You may find you like this convention; either way is acceptable, as
!	long as you are consistent.  However, I warn you because it is my habit
!	and I may inadvertently include some in quoted text.
! 5) I learned to comma-delimit every member of a list.  That means that I write
!	"red, blue, and green" where many would write "red, blue and green."  Both
!	methods have staunch adherents, so to show respect for the camp which opposes
!	my viewpoint, I have not altered your text.  As long as you are consistent,
!	there shouldn't be a problem.
! 6) I have tried to be consistent with the following convention:  if I have an
!	alternative word or set of words, I enclose the alternative in square
!	brackets.  The text in the brackets should either completely replace the
!	preceding word, or it should be deleted.  A little unnatural, I know, but
!	I stressed disambiguation over elegance.  Feel free to recommend a different
!	style, and I'm sorry if I failed to be consistent somewhere.

!---------------------------------------------------
! Scene 2: Home
!---------------------------------------------------

Object mijnslaap "In your bedroom"
  with name 'bedroom' 'room',
       description "The weak light of the moon which enters the room through the window envelops the furniture in the bedroom in a cloak of unworldly beauty. Only the soft breathing of your wife in the large bed breaches the silence. The door next to the heavy oaken wardrobe leads to the landing to the north. It is ice cold in the unheated room.",
! There's lots of things that are "not quite right" with this, but 
! a lot of things could be argued.  I believe it is more correct to
! use commas to separate the "which...window" clause.  I can see some
! arguing that point, however.  Also, on an even more subtle issue,
! I think that "...in the bedroom in..." uses the word "in" too often,
! causing a slight disruption.  While "in the bedroom" is probably the
! best description, I would consider changing it to "of the bedroom";
! that's an argument about which fault is the more severe.  And
! also there's even something slightly odd about the idea of the
! moonlight enveloping the furniture in a cloak...I get the image 
! (which is beautiful), but something is nagging at me about it.
! I'll have to think about it some more.
       n_to over_deur,
  has light transparent;

Object mijnbed "bed" mijnslaap
 class Furniture,
  with name 'bed' 'large',
       description "The large bed which you have built yourself fills almost half the room. Moonlight creeps over the many-coloured blanket, that goes up and down with each breath your wife takes.",
! The relative clauses (the ones started with "which" or "that) here are both
! "non-restrictive" (or "parenthetical") clauses, meaning that commas are
! necessary.  It also means that using "that" is technically incorrect.
!       description "The large bed, which you built yourself, fills almost half the
! room. Moonlight creeps over the many-coloured blanket, which goes up and down with each 
! breath your wife takes.",

! Some would contend that the rhythm of the second sentence is too
! strongly interrupted by the "additional" comma, and hence would
! intentionally make an alteration that is technically incorrect:
! "The large bed, which you built yourself, fills almost half the room.
! Moonlight creeps over the the many-coloured blanket that [which]
! goes up and down with each breath your wife takes."
! The chief weakness of this is that the structure would imply that
! there are more than one many-coloured blankets present, and you are 
! saying that moonlight creeps over the one going up and down with your
! wife's breath.  It's a matter of personal preference, really.

! There is also a stylistic question regarding the highly parallel sentence
! structure, but I haven't come up with a good recommendation about that yet.

       react_before [;
         Sleep: if (parent(player) == self) {
	   "Certainly, if you could just fall asleep again, if you didn't have to do anything and could just stop thinking. But it's not that easy. You will keep thinking of Maartje. You won't find sleep until you've tried to free her. And even if you were somehow able to fall asleep again, there will be another day tomorrow, and yet another the day after - and some day sleep will elude you. It's better to face the evil today than to postpone the inevitable until tomorrow.";
! There's apparently an extraneous "if" after "certainly."  There is also some
! possible debate over the "will keep thinking" phrase, as that tense
! would suggest that attempting to sleep was a realistic possibility.
! However, the very nature of this part excludes it, so I would prefer
! "would."
! "Certainly, you could just fall asleep again if you didn't have 
! to do anything and could just stop thinking--but it's not that easy. 
! You would keep thinking of Maartje. You won't find sleep until you've 
! tried to free her, and even if you were somehow able to fall asleep 
! again, there will be another day tomorrow, and yet another the day
! after--and some day sleep will elude you. It's better to face the
! evil today than to postpone the inevitable until tomorrow.";
! Stylistically, I'm not quite sold on this.  There's something just very
! slightly uneven about the overall tone.  I think it's bugging me that
! you're giving text about how impossible it is to sleep, and then the
! sentence proceeds to go on about multiple days successfully sleeping
! before failure.
! That suggests to me that you may have wanted to keep the initial
! "if," and try to give this a wistful, musing flavor.  In that case,
! the "certainly" should be omitted and you'd get something like:
! "If only you could just fall asleep again. If you didn't have to do
! anything and could just stop thinking--but it's not that easy. You keep
! thinking of Maartje, and even if you were somehow able to pretend she
! was contentedly sleeping in her bedroom, there will be another day tomorrow,
! and yet another the day after, and the truth would eventually overcome
! you. No, you won't find sleep until you've tried to free her. There is
! no sense in waiting until tomorrow; better to face the evil today.
	 };
       ],
  has  enterable transparent scenery;
  
Object deken "blanket" mijnbed
 class Prop,
  with name 'blanket' 'sheet' 'many-coloured',
       description "Red, blue and green squares, hardly recognisable in the twilight, alternate seemingly without pattern. Your wife Hilde made this blanket to fit the bed you built. You kept up the custom: only when both were ready could your marriage take place.",
! I am going to assume that there's a custom in place which says that you should
! build a bed and that your wife should make a blanket to fit the bed before
! getting married.
! This will probably not be an issue, but it makes a little "hiccup" in the
! rhythm, at least for me.  It's a nice detail, though I might consider omitting
! the sentence, unless it's important to the story.  If you want to keep that
! detail, I would recommend:
!        description "Red, blue and green squares, hardly recognisable in the twilight,
! alternate seemingly without pattern. Your wife Hilde made this blanket to fit the bed
! you built. You followed [obeyed] the tradition [custom]: only after finishing both
! could your marriage take place.",
! I feel that using tradition has a stronger resonance with your character,
! though I'm certain many will disagree.  Any four combinations (followed/tradition,
! followed/custom, obeyed/tradition, obeyed/custom) could probably work; it's
! a matter of taste, in my opinion.

       before [;
         Touch: "Softly you caress the blanket and think of happier times.";
! Grammatical issue:  missing comma
!        Touch: "Softly, you caress the blanket and think of happier times.";
       ],
   has male;

Object vrouw "Hilde" mijnbed
  with name 'wife' 'woman' 'lover' 'girlfriend' 'Hilde',
       slaap 0,
       description [;
         if (self.slaap == 0) {
	   self.slaap = 1;"You bow forward to better see Hilde's face; for a moment her breath falters and she seems to go rigid, then the steady rhythm returns. But you know enough - she doesn't sleep! She knows where you are going, but pretends to be asleep. A quiet approval she'd never be able to express? Or is she simply to afraid to confront you?";
! "Bow" is an awkward word for the action you describe.  Though it may
! seem more plain, I think "lean" is better.  Also, I think it makes more
! sense if you say she "goes rigid" before you say her breathing falters,
! rather than after.  The way you have phrased it makes it sound like she
! briefly flirted with death, rather than that the main character's action
! startled her.  I personally like to add the word "just" to emphasize the
! briefness of her breathing irregularity.
! The phrase "she doesn't sleep" suggests that she is a being that does
! not sleep at any time, that it is not necessary for her at all.  It is
! used loosely to mean what you intend (I think), which is that she does
! not sleep _at the moment_.  This is reinforced by "you know enough,"
! suggesting that it may have been past knowledge and not a recent discovery.
! There is a slight issue with the two uses of "sleep" in such close
! proximity.
! You may want to consider saying "express in words" instead of merely
! "express," though I like the current rhythm.  It's a matter of taste,
! as she IS expressing...something.  ;)
! Also, you have used "to" instead of "too" in the last sentence.  I would recommend:
!	   self.slaap = 1;"You lean forward to better see Hilde's face; for just a
! moment, she tenses and her breathing falters before resuming its steady rhythm. But
! it is enough--she is awake! She knows where you are going, but pretends to
! be asleep. A quiet approval she'd never be able to express [express in words]? Or
! is she simply too afraid to confront you?";
! Still I'm not entirely happy with "But...awake!"  It captures some of the surprise
! well, but I'm not quickly seeing a way to preserve that while completely avoiding
! the subtle suggestion that you just woke her.  I do actually like the relative
! parallel with the variations for the other verbs, so that's my preference at the
! immediate moment.
! There's also something about the "quiet approval" question that doesn't quite sit
! right, but I don't have anything better right now.
	 }
	 else {
	   "Hilde's tranquil angel's face and her rhythmic breathing do no betray that she is awake. She knows where you are going, but pretends to be asleep. A quiet approval she'd never be able to express? Or is she simply to afraid to confront you?";
! Typographical errors:  "not" instead of "no," "too" instead of "to."  Also,
! I think it's better to use the adjective "angelic" rather than "angel's."
!	   "Hilde's tranquil, angelic face and her rhythmic breathing do not betray that she
! is awake. She knows where you are going, but pretends to be asleep. A quiet approval
! she'd never be able to express? Or is she simply too afraid to confront you?";
	 };
       ],
       before [;
         Answer, Ask, AskFor, Tell, Squeeze, Spreek: if(self.slaap == 0){"No, you do not wish to wake Hilde. She is strongly opposed to you endangering your life in an attempt to free your daughter. During the past few days, each time you brought up your intention to save her from the talons of the baron, Hilde exclaimed that she couldn't bear to loose you as well. It is better to let her sleep and leave quietly.";}
! You misspelled "lose."  This is a very common error, even among
! native English-speakers.  Despite its frequency, it is a very
! objectionable error which will cause much criticism from
! those with high linguistic standards.  In other words, it happens 
! all the time, but for the Spring Thing, it would be a severe
! error.  I don't mean to sound too harsh, especially considering that
! you are NOT a native English-speaker.  It's easy enough to do
! accidentally, and I'll leave it at that.  I hope you don't take
! that the wrong way.
! The "endangering your life" sentence sounds a little off, partly
! because of its deviation from the prevailing rhythm.  I don't have
! a good fix handy.
! The last sentence treads on controversial ground.  I believe that it
! is technically incorrect, and at the very least ambiguous.
! From context, it is clear that you are saying (let her sleep && leave quietly)
! is better than NOT (let her sleep && leave quietly).  Stylistically,
! the structure mimics (let her (sleep && leave quietly)).  This is fine
! informally, as the meaning is clear.  Since it is the act of leaving
! quietly which contributes to permitting her to sleep, I would recommend
! simply reversing the order.  You could get contrary opinions on this, and
! if you want other recommendations, I could provide them with some more thought.
!         Answer, Ask, AskFor, Tell, Squeeze, Spreek: if(self.slaap == 0){"No, you do not
! wish to wake Hilde. She is strongly opposed to you endangering your life in an attempt 
! to free your daughter. During the past few days, each time you brought up your
! intention to save her from the talons of the baron, Hilde exclaimed that she couldn't 
! bear to lose you as well. It is better to leave quietly and let her sleep.";}
	   else {"It is better to keep up the fa@ccade. Let her pretend to be asleep. She knows exactly what you are going to do, and it is easier for her to accept when she is not confronted with it explicitly. Besides, you don't like to think about the risks yourself.";};
! Rhythm not quite right, tone a little uneven, but it serves.  I'll think
! about it more when I have the chance.  I will note that facade is a little
! awkward in that usage, as customarily (at least in North America) we would
! say it is your WIFE who is keeping up the facade, while the phrasing here
! suggests it is YOU who is keeping it up.  There will be disagreement here,
! but you may want to consider:
!	   else {"It is better not to disrupt the fa@ccade. Let her pretend to be asleep. 
! She knows exactly what you are going to do, and it is easier for her to accept when she 
! is not confronted with it explicitly. Besides, you don't like to think about the risks 
! yourself.";};
! Not all would say that such a change is positive, but I tend to doubt
! many would see it as negative, so it's worth considering.
         
	 Attack: "You ball your fists in a sudden moment of anger. ~It would be for eternity!,~ flashes through your mind - but as quickly the thought disappears and you no longer understand what it meant. You would never attack your wife Hilde. After all, you love her.";
! Flashes "through" suggests that the thought has already disappeared.  Here
! are some alternatives, depending on your specific taste:
!	 Attack: "You ball your fists in a sudden moment of anger. ~It would be for 
! eternity!,~ flashes into your mind--but just as quickly the thought disappears and you 
! no longer understand what it meant. You would never attack your wife Hilde. After all, 
! you love her.";
!	 Attack: "You ball your fists in a sudden moment of anger. ~It would be for 
! eternity!,~ flashes through your mind--but as soon as the thought disappears, you no 
! longer understand what it meant. You would never attack your wife Hilde. After all, you 
! love her.";

	 Kiss: if(self.slaap == 0){self.slaap = 1;"You bow forward to kiss Hilde's face; for a moment her breath falters and she seems to go rigid, then the steady rhythm returns. But you know enough - she doesn't sleep! She knows where you are going, but pretends to be asleep. A quiet approval she'd never be able to express? Or is she simply to afraid to confront you?";}
!	 Kiss: if(self.slaap == 0){self.slaap = 1;"You lean forward to kiss Hilde's face; 
! for just a moment, her breath falters before resuming its steady rhythm. But it is 
! enough--she is awake! She knows where you are going, but pretends to be asleep. A quiet 
! approval she'd never be able to express? Or is she simply to afraid to confront you?";}
	   else {"Your lips brush her pale cheek in the tenderest sign of farewell. Strangely, she seems to go rigid and to try to bury her head deeper into the pillow.";};
! I believe that's technically correct, but quite awkward.  Maybe:
!	   else {"Your lips brush her pale cheek in the tenderest sign of farewell. 
! Strangely, it seems as if she tenses and to tries to bury her head deeper into the 
! pillow.";};
	 
	 Listen: if(self.slaap == 0){"Hilde's rhythmic breathing is a reassuring sound in this dangerous night.";}
	   else{"Hilde's rhythmic breathing doesn't betray that she is, in fact, awake.";};
	 
	 Pull, Push: "You would never use violence against your wife.";
	 
	 Smell: "Her smell you would recognise among thousands. It is the smell of warmth and security.";
! It sounds slightly stilted that way, and I think "warmth and security" is
! better served by more directness:
!	 Smell: "You would recognise her smell among thousands; it is the smell of warmth 
! and security.";
	 
	 Touch, Knuffel: if(self.slaap == 0){"You'd better not do that; she might wake.";}
	   else{"You let your fingertips brush her cheek and play with her blond hair. She trembles momentarily, but keeps up her acting and pretends to be asleep.";};
! One "keeps up one's act" or "keeps acting."
!	   else{"You let your fingertips brush her cheek and play with her blond hair. She 
! trembles momentarily, but keeps up her act and pretends to be asleep.";};
	 
	 WakeOther: if(self.slaap == 0){<<spreek self>>;}
	   else{"How could you wake someone who is not asleep?";};
!	   else{"How can you wake someone who is not asleep?";};
       ],
       orders [;
         	 
	 default: if (self.slaap == 0) {
	     "You don't want to wake Hilde. Even if she wouldn't stop you, she would only worry unnecessarily if she knew which acts of heroism you will perform tonight.";}
! Purely stylistic, but I think "what acts of heroism" flows better.  The current
! phrasing makes it sound like she had a list of acts from which you selected.
!	     "You don't want to wake Hilde. Even if she wouldn't stop you, she would only
! worry unnecessarily if she knew what acts of heroism you will perform tonight.";}
	   else {
	     "Hilde doesn't react to your command.";
	   };
       ],
   has animate female proper scenery;
   
Object stoel "chair" mijnslaap
 class PropSup,
  with name 'chair' 'stool' 'seat',
       description "A simple wooden chair you hang your clothes on at night.",
! Grammatical issue: "hanging" preposition
!       description "A simple wooden chair on which you hang your clothes at night.",
! The so-called "hanging preposition," a preposition where its associated
! phrase is not explicitly stated, is a minor grammatical fault that some
! consider acceptable.  Usually it is overlooked when the preposition in question
! concludes the sentence.  An illustration which also happens to coincide
! with my attitude:  It's not an issue I'm overly concerned about.  However,
! I think that the feel of the sentence is clearly improved in this case by the
! strict usage, as having two prepositions right next to each other is awkward.
   has ;

   
Object kleding "your working clothes" stoel
  with name 'clothes' 'clothing' 'working',
! It is probably more customary to use the phrase "work clothes"
! in North America.  I do not know about the British convention, nor
! about all of the possible expressions in American.  The customary
! usage I am describing is fairly colloquial, so I will just note
! the observation without making a suggested correction.
       description "These are the clothes you wear when you go to fell trees in the woods on weekdays: tough jeans, a red-blue checked shirt and two heavy leather boots. A faint smell of sweat hangs around the shirt.",
! "These are the clothes you wear when you go to fell trees in the
! woods on weekdays: tough jeans, a red-blue checked shirt and two
! heavy leather boots. A faint smell of sweat hangs around the shirt.",
       before [;
         Wear: if(jas has worn && kleding hasnt worn) "You cannot wear you working clothes over your winter coat.";
! You need the possessive form for "your...clothes."
!          Wear: if(jas has worn && kleding hasnt worn) "You cannot wear your working
! clothes over your winter coat.";
	 Disrobe: if(jas has worn && kleding has worn) 
	             "You will have to take off your coat before you can take off your working clothes.";
	 Burn:
	     if(TestScope(toorts,player)) {
	       if(second == toorts || second == nothing) {
	         if(toorts has general) {
		   if(verhaaltracker.status == 5) {
		       "In these empty halls not many will be impressed by your self-immolation.";
! Grammatical issue: missing comma
! "In these empty halls, not many will be impressed by your self-immolation.";
		     } else {
                       ZelfVerbrand();
		     };
		 } else {
		   "Now that the torch has gone out, it can't set anything on fire.";
		 }
	       } else {
	         "You can't use that to make a fire.";
	       }
	     }		  
	], 
   has clothing proper transparent pluralname;
   
  Object hemd "lumberjack's shirt" kleding
    with name 'shirt' 'lumberjack' 'checked' 'sweat' 'woollen',
         description "A red-blue checked woollen shirt, spun, coloured and knitted by hand by your wife Hilde. The smell of the honest sweat of hard work hangs around it.",
! In American English, the shirt would be "checkered woolen" and not
! "checked woollen."  I know that the British spell "woollen" as you
! have, but I think that the Brits also use "checkered."
!          description "A red-blue checkered woollen shirt, spun, coloured and knitted by 
! hand by your wife Hilde. The smell of the honest sweat of hard work hangs around it.",
	 before [;
	   Wear: <<Wear kleding>>;
	   Take: <<Take kleding>>;
	   Disrobe: <<Disrobe kleding>>;
	   Drop: <<Drop kleding>>;
	   PutOn: <<PutOn kleding second>>;
	   Burn: <<Burn kleding>>;
	   Smell: "Unmistakebly the smell of sweat. But according to Hilde, that is erotic.";
! Grammatical Issue: Misspelling.  American English spells it "unmistakably,"
! which I believe is accepted in British English as well.  If memory serves,
! the British prefer "unmistakeably," so I will use that here.
! There are some who would consider it inappropriate to begin a
! sentence with "but."  Simplest would be to make this a single
! sentence.  Also, in this case, I think I would prefer "although."
!	   Smell: "Unmistakeably the smell of sweat, although according to Hilde, that is 
! erotic.";
! Personal note:  I would consider strengthening the unpleasantness of "smell"
! with the adjective "rank," though that might be overkill.
	 ],
     has concealed;
     
  Object broek "lumberjack's jeans" kleding
    with name 'jeans' 'lumberjack' 'trousers' 'tough' 'Levi^s',
         description "Blue Levi's, not improved by everything they have gone through while you did your job. That they are still intact is a proof of their durability.",
! I think that keeping the brand name out would be preferable.  Personal taste.
! The phrasing is a little sarcastic, which is okay.  However, it seem just
! a little out of place.  Maybe something more like:
!         description "Blue jeans, clearly showing signs of the abuse that they have gone 
! through while you did your job. That they are still intact is a proof of their 
! durability.",
! As a side note, I believe that Americans wouldn't use the present perfect
! ("have gone"), and would simply say "went."

	 before [;
	   Wear: <<Wear kleding>>;
	   Take: <<Take kleding>>;
	   Disrobe: <<Disrobe kleding>>;
	   Drop: <<Drop kleding>>;
	   PutOn: <<PutOn kleding second>>;
	   Burn: <<Burn kleding>>;
	  ],
     has male concealed;

  Object laarzen "lumberjack's boots" kleding
    with name 'boot' 'boots' 'leather' 'heavy' 'lumberjack' 'shoes',    
	 description "A pair of leather boots, with steel noses for extra protection.",
	 before [;
	   Wear: <<Wear kleding>>;
	   Take: <<Take kleding>>;
	   Disrobe: <<Disrobe kleding>>;
	   Drop: <<Drop kleding>>;
	   PutOn: <<PutOn kleding second>>;
	   Burn: <<Burn kleding>>;
	  ],
     has pluralname concealed;     
        
Object kast "wardrobe" mijnslaap
 class Furniture,
  with name 'wardrobe' 'closet' 'oaken' 'heavy',
       description "This large piece of furniture has taken you weeks. Not only did you feel the tree from which it is made yourself, you also sawed it into planks, sandpapered them, built the wardrobe, varnished it, and even made the subtle carvings. The memory of those happy first months of your marriage, when you and Hilde furnished your small house with little money but lots of enthusiasm, makes you smile.",
! "Feel" should be "fell."  There is also some issue with the list of
! actions you did first to the tree, then the planks, then the wardrobe,
! making that sentence quite awkward.  It could definitely use some
! refinement.  I'll give it some more thought.
   has container ~open openable scenery;
   
   Object kastkleding "large amount of dresses, jeans and other pieces of clothing" kast
    class Prop, 
     with name 'large' 'amount' 'dresses' 'jeans' 'other' 'pieces' 'clothing' 'clean',
          description "In this wardrobe you keep all your clothes, neatly folded and ironed, stacked into orderly piles. In a narrow part to the side hang all your wife's dresses.",
! The list describing the condition of your clothes is a bit awkward.
!          description "In this wardrobe you keep all your clothes, neatly folded,
! ironed and stacked into orderly piles. In a narrow part to the side hang all your 
! wife's dresses.",
	  before [;
	    Take, Remove: "This is not a good time to pick new clothes. Your working clothes of today will do well enough for your nightly quest.";
! Nightly quest can mean that you do it every night, rather than that
! you are currently doing it at night as opposed to during daytime.
!	    Take, Remove: "This is not a good time to pick new clothes. Your working clothes 
! of today will do well enough for your night's quest.";
! For better parallel with "of today," we can also use:
!	    Take, Remove: "This is not a good time to pick new clothes. Your working clothes 
! of today will do well enough for tonight's quest.";
	  ],
	  parse_name [;
	    if (NextWord() == 'clean' or 'new') {
	      if(NextWord() == 'shirt' or 'jeans' or 'boots' or 'shoes' or 'trousers' or 'clothes' or 'clothing') return 2;wn--;
	    };
	    if (NextWord() == 'in'){ if (NextWord() == 'wardrobe' or 'closet' or 'oaken' or 'heavy') return 3;wn--;};wn--;wn--;
	    return -1;
	  ],
      has static transparent ~scenery;
      
      Object jurken "dresses" kastkleding
       class Prop, 
	with name 'dresses' 'dress',
	     description "Your fingers brush past the rough, stiff cloth of the dresses. Practical and without frills, the working clothes of a busy housewife. In the very back of the wardrobe hides the white satin of Hilde's bridal gown, as if it doesn't want to be seen with the other clothes.",
! There's a sentence fragment (practical...housewife).  Probably best to
! add a subject rather than cram it into the first sentence, such as:
! 	     description "Your fingers brush past the rough, stiff cloth of the dresses. 
! Practical and without frills, they are the working clothes of a busy housewife. In the 
! very back of the wardrobe hides the white satin of Hilde's bridal gown, as if it doesn't 
! want to be seen with the other clothes.",
	 has concealed static pluralname;
	 
          Object trouwjurk "bridal gown" kastkleding
	   class Prop,
            with name 'bridal' 'gown' 'wedding',
                 description  [;
		   print "You hold the cool, soft cloth and close your eyes for a moment. Memories of your wedding resurface with great intensity; it is as if not a single day has gone by, so clearly can you see it all in your mind.";
		   if (verhaaltracker.bruiloft == 0) {Herinner(1);} ! Bruiloft
		   else{print "^";};
		   ],
		 before [;
		   Touch, Take: <<Examine self>>;
		 ],
             has concealed static;
		 

      Object broeken "jeans" kastkleding
       class Prop, 
	with name 'jeans' 'trousers',
	     description "These tough jeans are the ideal clothing for a lumberjack: indestructible.",
! Slightly odd sound.  I can fix one quirk, but others seem to pop up.
! I'll think about it some more.
	 has concealed static pluralname;
	 
   Object houtsnijwerk "carvings" mijnslaap
    class Prop, 
     with name 'carvings' 'decorations' 'wood' 'carving' 'figures',
          description "Hearts, birds, flowers and other figures that dwelt in your amorous mind when you carved these decorations circle artfully about each other.",
      has pluralname;

      Object hartjes_snijwerk "carved hearts" mijnslaap
       class Prop,
        with name 'heart' 'hearts',
	description "Small hearts run along the entire edge of the wardrobe.",
         has pluralname;

      Object vogels_snijwerk "carved birds" mijnslaap
       class Prop,
        with name 'bird' 'birds' 'flock' 'flocks',
	description "The carved birds circle gracefully around long trails of flowers.",
         has pluralname;
      
      Object bloemen_snijwerk "carved flowers" mijnslaap
       class Prop,
        with name 'flower' 'flowers' 'trail' 'trails',
	description "The large wardrobe is decorated with trails of flowers wherein both local and exotic flowers can be seen. Flocks of little birds circle around them.",
         has pluralname;      
	 
Object raam "window" mijnslaap
  with name 'window' 'windowpane' 'outside',
       description "Unworldly moonlight enters the room through the window. The village outside is covered under a thick layer of snow, making the church tower rise like an accusing black finger from a white sea. ~How is it possible,~ you wonder, ~that this scenery seems so lovely and so charming, but is so icy cold and hostile?~",
! "Unworldly moonlight enters the room through the window. The
! village outside is covered under a thick layer of snow, making
! the church tower rise like an accusing black finger from a white
! sea. ~How is it possible,~ you wonder, ~that this scenery seems
! so lovely and so charming, but is so icy cold and hostile?~",
       before [;
         Search: <<Examine self>>;
	 Close: if(self has open){give self ~open; "You close the window, and the cold wind no longer blows through the room.";};
	 Open: if(self hasnt open){give self open; "The window swings open, and an icy wind immediately enters the room. Standing in the moonlight, you let your gaze glide over the winter landscape. Somewhere to the right, far in the woods, lies the castle of the baron - the black structure wherein your little girls suffers mortal fears.";};
! You only have one girl, yes?
!	 Open: if(self hasnt open){give self open; "The window swings open, and an icy wind 
! immediately enters the room. Standing in the moonlight, you let your gaze glide over the 
! winter landscape. Somewhere to the right, far in the woods, lies the castle of the 
! baron--the black structure wherein your little girl suffers mortal fears.";};
	 Climb: "Although that is a way to get outside and start your journey to the castle, it seems more sensible to use the stairs.";
       ],
   has scenery openable ~open;
   
   Object barentopf_raam "Barentopf"
    class Prop,
     with name 'barentopf' 'topf',
          found_in mijnslaap tuin,
	  description [;
	    if (location == mijnslaap){
	      "Through the window you can see the snow-covered Barentopf rising behind the village. It is the highest hill in the neighbourhood.";
	    }
	    else{
	      "You can see the snow-covered Barentopf rising behind the village. It is the highest hill in the neighbourhood, but it does not lie in the right direction if you wish to reach the baron.";
	    };  
	   ],
      has scenery male;
      
   Object dorp_raam "village"
    class Prop,
     with name 'village' 'houses' 'house' 'residence' 'residences' 'city' 'hamlet',
          found_in mijnslaap tuin,
	  description [;
	    if (location == mijnslaap){
	      "Since your house lies on a hill at the edge of the village, you have a good view of the other residences from the window. Lights burn behind only a few windows; in this winter night, the rest of the village is wrapped in darkness and snow.";
	    }
	    else{
	      "Your house lies at the edge of the village, which in this cold December night is burdened with a thick layer of snow. At this time of the night nobody walks the streets any more. The village wraps itself in silence.";
! Missing comma; also note that "any more" is usually written "anymore"
! in modern American usage.  I don't know if that's also true of British usage.
!	      "Your house lies at the edge of the village, which in this cold December night 
! is burdened with a thick layer of snow. At this time of the night, nobody walks the 
! streets any more. The village wraps itself in silence.";
	    };  
	   ],
      has scenery;

   Object sneeuw_raam "snow"
    class Prop,
     with name 'snow' 'white' 'layer' 'thick',
          found_in mijnslaap tuin,
	  description "During the past few days, a thick layer of white snow has settled on the landscape. In the streets it has degenerated into a dirty brown sludge, but apart from that the snow gives the world a majestic appearance.",
! There's an awful lot of text about the dirty brown sludge in the streets
! relative to the "majestic appearance" it gives the whole "world."  It seems 
! almost sarcastic to me to use "apart from that" (but then, I'm pretty sarcastic
! by nature).  Maybe "elsewhere" instead.
!	  description "During the past few days, a thick layer of white snow has settled on 
! the landscape. In the streets it has degenerated into a dirty brown sludge, but  
! elsewhere the snow gives the world a majestic appearance.",
! You might consider de-emphasizing the streets, as in:
!	  description "During the past few days, a thick layer of white snow has settled on 
! the landscape. Except in the dirty streets, the snow gives the world a majestic 
! appearance.",
! If you want that long phrase in the streets, you may need to modify the
! WAY in which the snow lends majesty to the scene.
!	  description "During the past few days, a thick layer of white snow has settled on 
! the landscape. In the streets it has degenerated into a dirty brown sludge, but it 
! covers the rest of the scene like a majestic shroud.",
! Possibly some combination, such as:
!	  description "During the past few days, a thick layer of white snow has settled on 
! the landscape. In the streets it has degenerated into a dirty brown sludge, but
! elsewhere the snow gives the world a majestic appearance.",
! If you want to use the image of the dirty street to make a statement,
! perhaps you could reverse the order and possibly change words, such as:
!	  description "During the past few days, a thick layer of white snow has settled on 
! the landscape. The snow gives the world a pristine appearance, except in the streets,
! where it has degenerated into a dirty brown sludge.",
! Of course some other combinations can work too.
      has scenery;
      
   Object kerk_raam "church"
    class Prop,
     with name 'church' 'churchtower' 'tower',
          found_in mijnslaap tuin,
	  description [;
	    if (location == mijnslaap){
	      "The church tower rises like an accusing black finger from the white snow.";
! You might get some differing opinions, but I think the effect is much
! more intense if you reverse the order of the phrases.
!	      "The church tower rises from the white snow like an accusing black finger.";
	    }
	    else{
	      "The top of the church tower just peeks above the houses on the other side of the street, like a black finger against the star-covered sky.";
! I think that "star-filled" or "starry" works better.  We generally
! don't say that the sky is "covered" with stars.
!	      "The top of the church tower just peeks above the houses on the other side of 
! the street, like a black finger against the star-filled sky.";
	    };  
	   ],
      has scenery;
      
   Object sterren_raam "stars"
    class Prop,
     with name 'stars' 'star' 'galaxy' 'sky' 'twinkling',
          found_in mijnslaap tuin haarslaap bos_1 bos_2 bos_3 ophaalbrug,
	  description [;
	     if (wolvin.status == 99) {
	      "The night sky is spangled with thousands of flickering stars, like as many eyes that keep watch over the animals.";
! I actually think the "as many" weakens the statement and makes it
! sound less poetic.  You may also want to consider a different
! form of the verb.
!	      "The night sky is spangled with thousands of flickering stars, like many eyes 
! keeping watch over the animals.";
! That's still a bit off, as while the image of stars as eyes doesn't
! do it for me.  Perhaps expressed more metaphorically (omitting the "like").
	     } else
	      "The night sky is spangled with thousands of flickering stars, like as many eyes that keep watch over humanity.";
!	      "The night sky is spangled with thousands of flickering stars, like many eyes 
! keeping watch over humanity.";
	   ],
      has scenery pluralname;   
      
   Object maan_raam "moon"
    class Prop,
     with pname '.p' 'moon' '.p' 'moonlight' '.p' 'light' '.p' 'man' '.p' 'man' 'in' 'the' 'moon',
          found_in mijnslaap tuin bos_1 bos_2 bos_3 ophaalbrug overloop,
	  description [;
	    if (location == mijnslaap){
	      "Through the window you can see the full moon against a sky of stars. For a moment it seems as if the man in the moon winks at you reassuringly, but then he returns to his usual mysterious pose.";
	    };
	    if(location == overloop){
	      if(over_deur has open)
	        {"The silvery light of the moon flows from the bedroom into the landing.";}
	      else
	        {"The door to the bedroom is closed, so you cannot see the moon.";};
	    }
	    else if (wolvin.status ~= 99){
	      "The man in the moon regards you coldly, almost accusingly, from his elevated position.";
	    } else {
	      "The white ball gives more than enough light for your eyes to see by.";
	    };  
	  ],
      has scenery male;      
         
   Object bos_raam "woods"
    class Prop,
     with name 'forest' 'wood' 'woods',
          found_in mijnslaap tuin,
	  description "The woods lie as an ink-black mass over the hills. At this hour and in this season it is a dangerous place, full of wild animals.",
      has scenery;
      
Object over_deur
 class Deur, 
  with name '.p' 'door' '.p' 'door' 'to' '.x' 'the' '.or' 'my' '.or' 'our' 'bedroom' '.or' 'landing',
       short_name [;
          if (location == mijnslaap) print "door to the landing";
	  else print "door to the bedroom";
	  return true;
         ],
       description [;
          if (location == mijnslaap) "The close-fitting door separates your bedroom from landing, and hence from the rest of the house.";
! I don't know if this is an American thing, but it seems you're missing an article:
!          if (location == mijnslaap) "The close-fitting door separates your bedroom from 
! the landing, and hence from the rest of the house.";
	  else "This door leads back to the bedroom.";
	  
	 ],
       found_in mijnslaap overloop,
       door_dir [;
         if (location == mijnslaap) {return n_to;}
	 else {return s_to;};
	 ],
       door_to [;
         if (location == mijnslaap) return overloop;
	 else return mijnslaap;
         ],
   has door openable ~open scenery male;
   
   
Object nachtkastje "pine night table" mijnslaap
 class PropSup,
  with name 'table' 'night' 'pine',
       description [;
         print "A simple night table made of pinewood, the very first piece of furniture you ever made yourself.";
! I think that the "yourself" is unnecessary.  I would hesitate before
! change this, though, as the phrase "made yourself" appears so often
! in the text that it's practically its own verbal theme.
!          print "A simple night table made of pinewood, the very first piece of furniture 
! you ever made.";
! If you are trying to emphasize that it was done without any other assistance, then:
!         print "A simple night table made of pinewood, the very first piece of furniture 
! you ever made by [completely by] yourself.";
         if(parent(foto) == self){print " On the night table is a family photo.";};
         "";    
       ],
       before[;
         Open: "In the drawer of the night table lies nothing that could help you to free your daughter.";
       ],
   has ;
   
   Object deurtje "drawer" nachtkastje
    class Prop,
     with name 'drawer',
          description "A simple pine drawer without a lock.",
      has ;

Object foto "family photo" nachtkastje
  with name 'photo' 'family photo' 'picture' 'portrait' 'photograph',
       description [;
         if (verhaaltracker.status < 6){"This photograph, made for the tenth anniversary of you and Hilde's marriage, is a few years old. Solemnly, you stand next to each other as two black-and-white statues, once again clad in your wedding clothes. On the foreground, close against you, stands your daughter Maartje. Little Maartje, in her beautiful white dress, a radiant smile on her face. In the picture you have laid a protective arm across her shoulder. But now she has been kidnapped by the evil baron... once again you vow to do everything possible to free her.";}
! Ellipsis usage problem.  I noted above the spacing issue, but frankly I
! wouldn't use an ellipsis here at all.  Possibly a dash, if you really want
! this to be one sentence.  The problem is that the ellipsis is a bit too
! passive for the text there.
! "You and Hilde's marriage," while technically correct and logically (and politically)
! sound, is a bit awkward.  At least in American English, we would generally
! say either "your marriage" or "your marriage to [with] Hilde."  Also, we generally
! say "in the foreground" rather than "on the foreground."  Finally, I think
! it sounds more natural to say you are stand "like" statues.
!         if (verhaaltracker.status < 6){"This photograph, made for the tenth anniversary 
! of your marriage to Hilde, is a few years old. Solemnly, you stand next to each other 
! like two black-and-white statues, once again clad in your wedding clothes. In the 
! foreground, close against you, stands your daughter Maartje. Little Maartje, in her 
! beautiful white dress, a radiant smile on her face. In the picture you have laid a 
! protective arm across her shoulder. But now she has been kidnapped by the evil
! baron--once again you vow to do everything possible to free her.";}
! Some more subtle flaws, but that's reasonable for a first pass.
	 else {"This photograph, made for the tenth anniversary of you and Hilde's marriage, is a few years old. Solemnly, you stand next to each other as two black-and-white statues, once again clad in your wedding clothes. On the foreground, close against you, stands your daughter Maartje. Little Maartje, in her beautiful white dress, wears a grave expression. She seems very uncomfortable with the arm you have laid across her shoulders.";};
!	 else {"This photograph, made for the tenth anniversary of your marriage to Hilde, 
! is a few years old. Solemnly, you stand next to each other like two black-and-white 
! statues, once again clad in your wedding clothes. In the foreground, close against you, 
! stands your daughter Maartje. Little Maartje, in her beautiful white dress, wears a 
! grave expression. She seems very uncomfortable with the arm you have laid across her 
! shoulders.";};
       ],
       after [;
         PutOn: if(parent(self) == nachtkastje){give self concealed;};
	 Take: give self ~concealed; return false;
	 default: return false;
       ],
       before [;
	     Burn:
	      if(TestScope(toorts,player)) {
	       if(second == toorts || second == nothing) {
	         if(toorts has general) {
		   remove self;
		   "The photo that used to document your happy family life is utterly consumed by the fire, until nothing than the shadow of a lie remains.";
		 } else {
		   "Now that the torch has gone out, it can't set anything on fire.";
		 }
	       } else {
	         "You can't use that to make a fire.";
	       } 
	     }        
       ],
   has concealed;

   
   
   
   
Object overloop "On the landing"
  with name 'landing' 'corridor' 'upstairs',
       description [;
         print "The landing is enveloped by a shadowy darkness. ";
	 if(over_deur has open){print "Moonlight enters the landing through the open door to your bedroom in the south. ";} else {print "The door to your bedroom is closed. ";};
	 if(maartje_deur has open){print "To the north, the red door to Maartje's room is slightly ajar. ";} else {print "A red door to the north leads to the room of your daughter Maartje. ";};
	 "Next to the stairs down stands an elegant cupboard, above which hangs a large ornate mirror in a gilded frame.";
	 ],
       s_to over_deur,
       n_to maartje_deur,
       d_to over_trap,
       out_to over_trap,
       before [;
        Go: if(noun == d_to) {TrapNaarTuin(); return true;};
       ],
   has light transparent; 
   
Object kastje "cupboard" overloop
  with name 'cupboard',
       description "This elegantly carved cupboard is one of the few pieces of furniture in the house that you have not made yourself: it comes from the inheritance of Hilde's grandmother. The two little doors in the front don't quite fit, a defect you have been planning to fix for years, though you somehow never come around to it.",
! In American English, the last line would be:
! planning to fix for years, though you somehow never got around to it.",
! I don't know about British.

   has container openable ~open scenery;
   
   Object deurtjes "doors" overloop
     with name 'doors' 'little',
          description "Made of the same cherry wood as the rest of the cupboard, wear and tear has made them hang slightly askew on their hinges.",
! Just a note:  above, you use "pinewood" instead of "pine wood."  I don't
! know if this is another dialectical/regional thing, but if you do that,
! I would be comfortable with "cherrywood" instead of "cherry wood."
	  before [;
	    Open: <<Open kastje>>;
	  ],
      has scenery pluralname;
      
      Object scharnieren "hinges" overloop
        with name 'hinges' 'hinge' 'copper',
	     description "Four copper hinges than still functional perfectly, but have gotten a bit loose in the course of the years.",
! Need "that" instead of "than."
!	     description "Four copper hinges that still functional perfectly, but have 
! gotten a bit loose in the course of the years.",
	 has scenery pluralname;
     
   
Object fotoboek "album" kastje
  with pname 
          '.p' 'album' '.p' 'book' '.p' 'photoalbum' '.p' 'photos' '.p' 'photographs' '.p' 'family-album' '.p' 'photo' '.p' 'next' 'page' '.or' 'photo' '.p' 'more' 'photos',
       gesloten 1,
       description [;
         self.gesloten = 0;
         if (verhaaltracker.fotoalbum < 5) {Herinner(2);} ! Fotoalbum
	 else{"Once again you leaf through the photo album, but this time you don't let yourself get carried away by your memories. No matter how closely you look, the second half of the book remains empty.";};
! I think that technically, you should have a comma after "once again."
!	 else{"Once again, you leaf through the photo album, but this time you don't let 
        ],
       before [;
         Consult, Open: <<Examine self>>;
	 Close: if (self.gesloten == 1) {
	     "The album is already closed.";
	   } 
	   else {
	     if (verhaaltracker.fotoalbum == 5) {
	       "With a melancholy sigh you close the photo album.";
!	       "With a melancholy sigh, you close the photo album.";
	     } 
	     else {
	       "You decide not to look at the rest of the photos, and close the album.";
	     };
	   };
	 Burn:
	     if(TestScope(toorts,player)) {
	       if(second == toorts || second == nothing) {
	         if(toorts has general) {
		   remove self;
		   "You relinquish the album to the flames and see, with a mixture of horror and grim satisfaction, how even the memory to a lost happiness falls prey to their eternal hunger.";
		 } else {
		   "Now that the torch has gone out, it can't set anything on fire.";
		 }
	       } else {
	         "You can't use that to make a fire.";
	       }
	     }
       ],
   has transparent;
   
   Object lijmresten "traces of glue" fotoboek
    class Prop,
     with name 'glue' 'traces',
          description "Simple traces of glue, as if all the photographs made after a certain date have been torn out of the album."
      has pluralname concealed;

Object spiegel "mirror" overloop
 class Prop,
  with name 'mirror',
       description [;
         print "You gaze at yourself from the mirror";
	   if(kleding has worn) {
             print ", heroism shining in your eyes. Your macho lumberjack outfit fits like a glove and accentuates the heavy muscles of your arms. ";
           }
           else {
             print ". In your nightshirt, you look more desperate than heroic, but appearances are deceiving. ";
           };
         print "A grim smile plays around the corners of your mouth when you think of the fear the baron will feel when you enter his castle to ";
	   if(parent(axe) == player){
	     "decapitate him with your heavy axe.";
	   }
	   else {
	     "pound him into pulp with your strong fists.";
	   };
       ],
       before [;
         Attack: "The time for that has not yet come.";
       ],
   has ;
   
   Object spiegel_lijst "frame" overloop
    class Prop,
     with name 'frame' 'gilded',
          description "The excessively decorated frame, painted with gold, would fit in better with your mother-in-law's interior than it does in yours - no surprise, since she has given it to you. It is unfortunate that as long as she regularly comes to visit you, you cannot throw it away.",
! The parallel with your mother-in-law's interior is better preserved with:
!           description "The excessively decorated frame, painted with gold, would fit in 
! better with your mother-in-law's interior than it does with yours - no surprise, since 
! she has given it to you. It is unfortunate that as long as she regularly comes to visit 
! you, you cannot throw it away.",
	  before [;
	   Attack: "You would love to, but social conventions stop you.";
	  ],
      has ;
   
Object maartje_deur
 class Deur, 
  with pname 'door' 'red' '.p' '.x' 'red' 'door' 'to' '.x' 'Maartje^s' '.or' 'room' '.or' 'bedroom' '.or' 'landing',
       short_name [;
          if (location == haarslaap) print "door to the landing";
	  else print "door to Maartje's room";
	  return true;
         ],
       description [;
          if (location == overloop) "This door, painted in a happy red, leads to the room of your kidnapped daughter Maartje.";
	  else "This door leads beack to the landing.";
	  
	 ],
       found_in haarslaap overloop,
       door_dir [;
         if (location == haarslaap) {return s_to;}
	 else {return n_to;};
	 ],
       door_to [;
         if (location == haarslaap) return overloop;
	 else return haarslaap;
         ],
   has door openable ~open scenery;
   
Object over_trap "stairs"
  with pname 'stairs' '.p' 'down' '.p' 'downstairs' '.p' '.x' 'wooden' 'stairs' '.x' 'down' '.p' 'downwards' '.p' 'outside',
       description "The wooden stairs circle downwards into an ink-black depth.",
       found_in overloop,
       door_dir d_to,
       door_to tuin,
       before [;
         Climb, Go, Enter: 
	   if (noun == self || noun == d_obj || noun == tuin) {
	     TrapNaarTuin();
	     return true;
	   };
       ],
   has door scenery pluralname open;
   
   
   [ TrapNaarTuin ;
     print "Cautiously you seek your way downwards through the darkness. In the hall you grab your winter coat and put it on, then you open the front door and step outside into the garden.";
     VraagToets(0,0,0);
     PlayerTo(tuin);
     move jas to player; give jas worn; give tuindeur open;
     return true;
   ];
   
   [ TuinNaarTrap ;
     if (tuindeur has open) {print "Through the open front door you step inside again.";}
       else {print "Opening the front door, you step inside.";};
     print " You hang your coat on the hall-stand, and climb the dark stairs back to the landing.";
     VraagToets(0,0,0);
     PlayerTo(overloop);
     move jas to over_trap; give jas ~worn;
     return true;   
   ];

   Object jas "winter coat" over_trap
     with name 'coat' 'winter',
          description [;
	    print "You bought this winter coat recently, after much urging by your wife. True, there were holes in your old one, and it wasn't half as warm, but it was familiar, it was "; style bold; print "your"; style roman; " winter coat - but women don't understand that sort of thing.";
! Dash usage.
! it was "; style bold; print "your"; style roman; " winter coat--but women don't 
! understand that sort of thing.";
	  ],
	  before [;
	     Disrobe: if(verhaaltracker.status < 6 && kleding hasnt worn) {
	         "It is icy cold outside. Only your thick winter coat protects you against freezing.";
! Note that you used "ice cold" to describe your room and "icy cold" here.
! In this case, I think consistency probably should win over variety, unless
! you have a reason for the difference.
	       }
	       else if (verhaaltracker.status < 6 && kleding has worn) 
	         "It is icy cold outside. The thick winter coat and your working clothes are necessary to protect you against freezing.";
             Burn: <<Burn kleding>>;
	  ],
      has clothing;
   
      
   
Object haarslaap "In Maartje's room"   
  with name 'maartje' 'room' 'bedroom' 'maartje^s',
       description "Without Maartje's radiant presence, her room seems dead and empty. It is a dreary sight: a bed in which nobody sleeps, a dollhouse with which nobody plays, a desk behind which nobody studies. The gay colours in which you painted her ceiling and furniture appear in the pale light of the stars as a pallet of greys. The door to the south leads back to the landing.",
       s_to maartje_deur,
       react_before [;
         Sleep: 
	    "To simply fall asleep again and dream of Maartje, to do nothing, to think of nothing but her slender appearance - but it is not that easy. She has been kidnapped by the baron, and that knowledge will disturb your dreams. You will not be able to sleep until you have tried to free her. And even if you were somehow able to fall asleep again, there will be another day tomorrow, and yet another the day after - and some day sleep will elude you. It's better to face the evil today than to postpone the inevitable until tomorrow.";
! Same issues as in your own bed, mostly.
! 	    "To simply fall asleep again and dream of Maartje, to do nothing, to think of 
! nothing but her slender appearance--but it is not that easy. She has been kidnapped by 
! the baron, and that knowledge will disturb your dreams. You will not be able to sleep 
! until you have tried to free her. And even if you were somehow able to fall asleep 
! again, there will be another day tomorrow, and yet another the day after--and some day 
! sleep will elude you. It's better to face the evil today than to postpone the inevitable 
! until tomorrow.";
! Or the parallel alternative:
! 	    "To simply fall asleep again and dream of Maartje, to do nothing, to think of 
! nothing but her slender appearance--but it's not that easy. You keep
! thinking of Maartje. And even if you were somehow able to pretend she
! was contentedly sleeping by your side, there will be another day tomorrow,
! and yet another the day after, and the truth would eventually overcome
! you. No, you won't find sleep until you've tried to free her. There is
! no sense in waiting until tomorrow; better to face the evil today.
       ],
   has light transparent; 
   
Object maartjebed "Maartje's bed" haarslaap
 class Furniture, 
  with name 'bed' 'Maartje^s' 'child^s',
       geslapen 0,
       description [;
         print "Under the window is Maartje's bed, a spacious child's bed that is, like almost every piece of furniture in your house, a product of your diligent labour.";
         if(self.geslapen == 0){
	   if(parent(kussen) == self){
	     print " The bed has been neatly made, the sheets perfectly straight, the pillow puffed up. Too virginal, too untouched, as if it was never meant to be used by humans.";
	   }
	   else{
	     print " The bed has been neatly made, the sheets perfectly straight, although the pillow is missing. It has evidently not been slept in.";
	   };
	 } 
	 else{
	   if(parent(kussen) == self){
	     print " The sheets on the bed are disorderly and the pillow lies to one side, as if someone has recently slept here. It makes the room look less sepulchral.";
	   }
	   else{
	     print " The sheets on the bed are disorderly, as if someone has recently slept here. It makes the room look less sepulchral.";
	   };
	 };       
	 "";
       ],
       before [;
         Search, Look: if(parent(dagboek_sleutel) == kussen) {
	        move dagboek_sleutel to player;
		give dagboek_sleutel ~concealed;
		"You find a small copper key hidden under the pillow. Surprised, you pick it up.";
	      } else return false;
	 Enter: self.geslapen = 1; return false;

       ],
   has enterable container transparent scenery open proper;
   
   Object deken_maartje "Maartje's blankets" maartjebed
    class Prop,
     with name 'sheet' 'sheets' 'blanket' 'blankets',
          description [;
	    if(maartjebed.geslapen == 0){
	      "The red and blue blankets lie neatly on the bed.";
	    }
	    else {
	      "The red and blue blankets have been draped over the bed in a disorderly fashion.";
	    };
	  ],
	  before [;
	    Attack: maartjebed.geslapen = 1;
	            "Fiercely, you hit and tear at the sheets and blankets on Maartje's bed to disturb their unbearable neatness.";
            LookUnder: maartjebed.geslapen = 1;
	            "You look under the blankets, but do not find a thing.";
            Pull: maartjebed.geslapen = 1;
	            "You pull at the sheets and blankets on Maartje's bed to disturb their unbearable neatness.";
	    Push, Take, Kreuk: maartjebed.geslapen = 1;
	            "You crumple the sheets and blankets on Maartje's bed to disturb their unbearable neatness.";
	  ],
      has proper pluralname;
   
   Object kussen "Maartje's pillow" maartjebed
     with name 'pillow' 'Maartjes' 'Maartje^s' 'pillowcase',
          description "Maartje's pillow is comfortably soft, as it is filled with feathers. A jocund pillowcase in all the colours of the rainbow envelops it.",
	  before [;
	    Examine, Search, LookUnder: if(parent(dagboek_sleutel) == kussen) {
	        move dagboek_sleutel to player;
		give dagboek_sleutel ~concealed;
		"You find a small copper key hidden under the pillow. Surprised, you pick it up.";
	      } else return false;
	    Take: if(parent(dagboek_sleutel) == kussen) {
	        move dagboek_sleutel to player;
		give dagboek_sleutel ~concealed;
		"You find a small copper key hidden under the pillow. Surprised, you pick it up.";
	      } else {
	        "The pillow is too big and awkward to carry along on your quest. The bed is a better place for it.";
	      };
	  ],
      has proper;

      Object dagboek_sleutel "ornate key" kussen
        with name 'key' 'small' 'copper' 'ornate',
	     description "The small copper key, ornamented with delicate patterns, shows traces of intensive use.",
	     before [;
	       Drop, ThrowAt:
	         if(parent(player) == kasteel_kerker_cel && parent(self) == player) {
		   if(kasteel_kerker_cel has locked)
		     sleutelweg.select(1);
		     return true;
		 }
	       return false;
	     ],
	 has concealed;
   
Object raam_maar "window" haarslaap
  with name 'window' 'windowpane' 'outside',
       description "Threateningly, the coniferous forest looks at you through the window, its hostile silence a promise of hardship and danger. Somewhere, hidden deeply within it, lies the baron's castle. And somewhere, deep in the castle, the dungeon where Maartje is imprisoned. You can almost see how, right now, the cries for her father, lonely, alone, abandoned, locked up in a cold stony cell.",
       before [;
         Search: <<Examine self>>;
	 Close: if(self has open){give self ~open; "You close the window, and a funereal silence returns.";};
	 Open: if(self hasnt open){give self open; "The window swings open, and the sound of the wind through the coniferous forest softly sneaks into the room. Somewhere, far away, you hear the howling of wolves.";};
	 Climb: "Although that is a way to get outside and start your journey to the castle, it seems more sensible to use the stairs.";
       ],
   has scenery openable ~open;   
   
   Object sneeuw_maar "snow" haarslaap
    class Prop,
     with name 'snow' 'white' 'layer',
          description "During the past few days, a thick layer of white snow has settled on the landscape. The branches of the trees bow down under their white burden.",
      has scenery;
      
   Object maan_maar "moon" haarslaap
    class Prop,
     with name 'moon',
          description "From this side of the house the moon cannot be seen.",
      has scenery;      
         
   Object bos_maar "forest" haarslaap
    class Prop,
     with name 'forest' 'wood' 'woods' 'trees' 'tree' 'coniferous',
	  description "The forest lies as an ink-black mass upon the hills. And in the heart of this darkness lives the malicious baron.",
      has scenery;
   
   Object heuvels_raam "hills"
    class Prop,
     with name 'hills' 'hill',
          found_in haarslaap mijnslaap,
	  description "In the summer, the rolling landscape gives this area a picturesque appearance. But in these cold winter months, no amount of hills can brighten the sombre woods.",
      has pluralname scenery;      
      
   Object wolven_maar "wolves" haarslaap
    class Prop,
     with name 'wolves' 'wolf',
          counter 0,
	  description [;
	    print "You can see no movement in the woods, not from this distance.";
	    if (raam_maar has open) {
	      print " But lamenting howls rise, hardly audible, from the far hills.";
	    };
	    "";
	  ],
	  before [;
	    Listen: if(self.counter == 0){self.counter = 1; "You lean out of the window to better hear the howling of a pack of wolves. For a moment it seems as if the many lamentations form a single melody, but then they suddenly go silent. An ominous silence follows, and you heave a sigh of relief when a minute later the sound of a lonely wolf comes from another part of the forest.";}
	    else {
	      "From the depths of the forest, now and then rises the howling of wolves.";
	    };
	  ],
      has scenery pluralname;
      
    Object wind "wind" haarslaap
     class Prop,
      with name 'wind',
           before [;
	     Examine, Listen: "The wind sighs softly along the snow-laden branches of the coniferous forest.";
	   ],
       has male;
      
Object poppenhuis "dollhouse" haarslaap
 class Furniture,
  with name 'dollhouse',
       description "Once you built this dollhouse yourself: three stories, with little doors and windows that can actually open and close, all kinds of furniture, and wooden dolls with finely carved faces that make the house their home. Hilde made the curtains, the carpets and little clothes for the dolls.",
       played 0,
       before [;
         Play: if(self.played == 0) {
	           self.played = 1;
	           "You lower yourself to your knees before the dollhouse, and gaze dispiritedly at the dolls. Then you pick up the mother doll with your left hand en the father doll with your right hand. You have father enter the house through a little door.^^~Well mum,~ he says, ~I have worked very hard today. You have no idea how hungry I am!~^^~Well dad,~ she answers in a strange high-pitched voice, ~that is good, because I have cooked an entire doll's kettle full of doll's porridge. Children, come and eat, father is home!~^^You put the two dolls on their doll's chairs, and pick up the doll's daughter. She walks to the sitting room, en whan she sees her father she cries: ~Daddy!~^^^Distressed, you close your eyes and put the dolls away.";}
	        else {
		   "You had better go and free Maartje than play again with the dolls.";
		  };
	       
       ],
   has scenery container open;
   
   Object pop_deurtjes "doll's doors" poppenhuis
    class Prop,
     with name 'doors' 'door' 'little' 'doll^s' 'handle' 'handles',
          description "Painted doll's doors with moving doll's handles separate the different rooms in the dollhouse. This way, the dolls have some privacy, and less nuisance from draughts.",
      has pluralname;
      
   Object pop_meubels "doll's furniture" poppenhuis
    class Prop,
     with name 'furnitures' 'chairs' 'tables' 'chair' 'table' 'little' 'doll^s',
          description "Small doll's chairs are grouped around small doll's tables.",
      has pluralname;
   
   Object pop_raampjes "doll's windows" poppenhuis
    class Prop,
     with name 'windows' 'window' 'doll^s' 'little',
          description "The sides of the dollhouse are adorned with doll's windows, in front of which hang moveable doll's curtains. Here the dolls can look outside, for let's be honest: the front of the house is opened to us, but obviously not to the dolls.",
      has pluralname;

   Object pop_gordijntjes "doll's curtains" poppenhuis
    class Prop,
     with name 'curtains' 'curtain' 'doll^s' 'little',
          description "Hilde made small curtains that fit in with the rest of the interior. Dolls have style too.",
	  before [;
	    Pull, Push: "You pull the delicate doll's curtains closed, then push them open again.";
	  ],
      has pluralname;

   Object pop_kleedjes "doll's carpets" poppenhuis
    class Prop,
     with name 'carpets' 'carpet' 'little' 'doll^s',
          description "Soft doll's carpets with wild patterns cover the wooden floor of the dollhouse, and give that cosy appearance to the doll's rooms that they would otherwise miss.",
      has pluralname;
      
   Object pop_kleertjes "doll's clothing" poppenhuis
    class Prop,
     with name 'clothing' 'clothes' 'doll^s' 'little',
          description "Hilde sowed these doll's clothes with eye for the finest detail: dresses, pants, shirts, skirts, shoes, even tiny socks and hats have not been forgotten. It might well be that you have never seen Hilde as happy as when she could put all her love and creativity into this.",
      has pluralname;   
   
   Object poppen "dolls" poppenhuis
     with 
          name 'dolls' 'doll' 'father' 'mother' 'son' 'daughter',
          description [;
	      if(poppenhuis.played == 0) "Four dolls live in the dollhouse: a father doll, a mother doll, a son doll and a daughter doll. Father is sitting on the couch, reading a newspaper, while mother, probably busy cooking a meal, stands in the kitchen. The son gazes thoughtfully out of the window, while the daughter doll, still dressed in her little red dress, lies on her bed in her bedroom.";
	      if(poppenhuis.played ~= 0) "Four dolls live in the dollhouse: a father doll, a mother doll, a son doll and a daughter doll. Father and mother are sitting on chairs around the dinner table, where you just put them yourself. The son gazes thoughtfully out of the window, while the daughter doll, still dressed in her little red dress, lies on the floor of the kitchen.";
	   ],
	  before [;
	    Take: "Right now, the dolls are the only ones in your house that have a normal family life, and you're not planning to disturb that.";
	    Play: <<play poppenhuis>>;
	  ],
      has pluralname;
     
Object bureau "desk" haarslaap
 class Furniture,
  with name 'desk' 'table' 'beech',
       description "The small desk made of lacquered beech wood is covered with sheets of paper, notebooks and crayons.",
   has scenery supporter;
   
   Object papier "sheets of paper" bureau
    class Prop,
     with name 'sheet' 'paper' 'sheets' 'blank' 'stacks' '.p' '.or' 'sheets' '.or' 'stacks' '.x' 'of' 'paper',
          description "Several neat stacks of blank paper lie on the left side of the desk, but dozens of drawings chaotically cover the rest of the tabletop.",
      has pluralname;
      
      Object tekeningen "drawings" bureau
       class Prop,
        with name 'drawing' '.p' 'drawings',
	     description "All the drawings Maartje has made are gay and happy: butterflies flap about a meadow full of flowers; a small house with your family in front of it; a father pulling a sledge on which his daughter is sitting. The bright colours burst from the white paper, even in the pale light of the stars.",
	 has pluralname;
	     
	
   
   Object dagboek "diary" bureau
     with counter 0,
          pname 'fake' 'leather' '.p' '.x' 'red' 'diary',
	  with_key dagboek_sleutel,
	  before [;
	    Open: if (self has locked && parent(dagboek_sleutel) == player) {
	        <Unlock self dagboek_sleutel>;  return true;
	     }
	     else {
	       <<Examine self>>;
	     };
            Unlock: if (self hasnt locked) "The diary has already been unlocked.";
	      if (self has locked && second == dagboek_sleutel) {
	         print "You insert the copper key into the diary's lock, and carefully turn it around. With a soft click the lock jumps open.^";
		 give self ~locked;
		 return true;}
	      print "After several failed attempts, you conclude that ", (the) second, IsorAre(second), " not the key to this diary.^"; return true;
	    Consult, Examine: if (self has locked && parent(dagboek_sleutel) ~= player) {
	      "The book, bound in fake red leather, must be a diary, since it is locked by a small copper lock. But although you burn with curiosity, you will not damage Maartje's diary.";
	    }
	    else {
	      if (self has locked && parent(dagboek_sleutel) == player) {<Unlock self dagboek_sleutel>; print "^";}
	      if (self.counter == 0) {
	        self.counter = 1;
		print "You feel absurdly guilty when you open the diary to read what secrets your little daughter has entrusted to it. Of course a father shouldn't do this, but this is an emergency. Perhaps it contains something that can help you free her.";
		
		VraagToets(0,0,0);
		
		"But nothing is written in the diary, not a single word. Instead, the pages of the first half of the diary have been completely filled in with black ink. From top to bottom, from left to right, with unfailing precision each white page has been transformed into solid black. The second half of the diary is still blank, untouched, stainless. Distraught, you close the diary.";
	      }
	      else {
	        "Once again you examine the diary, and once again are there only pages coloured a solid black in the first half, and lily-white pages in the second half. Maartje has never written a word, or she has made them all unreadable.";
	      };
	    };
	   Burn:
	     if(TestScope(toorts,player)) {  
	       if(second == toorts || second == nothing) {
	         if(toorts has general) {
		   remove self;
		   move kaft to location;
		   "The diary immediately goes up in flames, and the deep black of the ink changes into the grey black of ashes. After several minutes only the non-flammable fake leather cover of the diary remains, a form without content.";
		 } else {
		   "Now that the torch has gone out, it can't set anything on fire.";
		 }
	       } else {
	         "You can't use that to make a fire.";
	       }
	     }
	  ], 
      has openable ~open lockable locked;
      
Object plafond "ceiling" haarslaap
 class Prop,
  with name 'ceiling' 'up',
       description "Painted with sweet scenes, normally the ceiling of Maartje's room radiates gaiety and carefreeness.",
   has ;
       
Object meubilair "furniture" haarslaap
 class Prop,
  with name 'furniture',
       description "A bed, a desk and a beautiful dollhouse, complete with tiny beds and tiny desks and - no, not with a tiny dollhouse - make up the furniture in Maartje's room.",
   has ;
   
Object beer "teddy" haarslaap
  with name 'bear' 'teddy' 'teddybear' 'teddy-bear' 'toy' 'brown',
       description [;
       if(verhaaltracker.status < 5){
         "Brown has been Maartje's favourite toy animal and most loyal companion for years. The smile on his face is reassuring, and even if his eyes are merely buttons, there seems to reside some kind of intelligence in them.";
        }	 
	else {
	  "Brown has been Maartje's favourite toy animal and most loyal companion for years. But the smile on his face is melancholic rather than reassuring, and even if his eyes are merely buttons, they nevertheless seem to be about to start crying bitterly.";
	};
       ],
       before [;
           Knuffel: "You take the bear into your strong arms, and hug him as if your life depends on it. A tear rolls over your cheek when you remind yourself that Maartje doesn't even have the consolation of her teddy.";
	   
	   Kiss: "You give the teddy a kiss on his brown snout, and whisper in his ear that you will bring back Maartje.";
	   
	   Burn:
	     if(TestScope(toorts,player)) {  
	       if(second == toorts || second == nothing) {
	         if(toorts has general) {
		   remove self;
		   move knopen to location;
		   "Brown burns like oil, and smokes like a chimney. When the flames reach his head, he looks with a sad expression of incomprehension. ~I thought you loved me...~ is the message in his button eyes.^^
		   ~Brown, no, I'm sorry,~ you stammer, and you try to extinguish the fire. But you are too late, and nothing rests from the teddy but the two buttons, half-melted.";
		 } else {
		   "Now that the torch has gone out, it can't set anything on fire.";
		 }
	       } else {
	         "You can't use that to make a fire.";
	       }
	     }
       ],
   has male;
   
   Object knopen "Brown's eyes"
     with name 'eyes' 'Brown^s' 'button' 'buttons',
          description 
	     "Two black buttons, half-melted in the searing fire to which you committed Brown, are all that this honest bear has left to the world.",
      has pluralname;
   
   
        
            
   
Object tuin "In the garden"
  with name 'garden' 'outside' 'downstairs' 'down',
       description "Your front garden too has been buried by a thick layer of snow, which hides all plants from view. Only a few bare bushes that crouch against the garden fence penetrate the white blanket. Behind you, the front door leads back into the house, while the road to the east winds through the village and the forest to the baron's castle. From his unreachable heights the moon looks reproachfully down on you. The tip of the church tower can be seen above the houses on the other side of the road.",
       u_to tuindeur,
       n_to tuindeur,
       in_to tuindeur,
       s_to "If you go to the south, you'll end up on the village square, next to the church. That is not the path that leads to Maartje.",
       w_to "Going west is the exact opposite of what you should be doing: the road would take you out of the valley, each step taking you farther away from Maartje and the baron.",
       e_to bosdeur,
   has light transparent;

   Object tuinhek "garden fence" tuin
    class Prop,
     with name 'fence' 'garden' 'opening',
          description "A low wooden fence separates your front garden from the street. The garden path leads to the opening in the fence.",
	  before [;
	    Close, Open: "The fence does not enclose the garden entirely: an opening has been left in it.";
	  ],
      has ;
   
   Object tuinpad "garden path" tuin
    class Prop,
     with name 'path' 'garden',
          description "There is but a little snow on the garden path, because you swept it only this afternoon. From the front door it goes to the opening in the fence.",
      has ;
      
Object tuinstruik "bushes" tuin
    class Prop,
     with name 'bush' 'bushes',
          description "The bushes have long lost both their leaves and their charm. As wooden skeletons they await the new spring.",
      has pluralname;
      
   Object overkant "other side" tuin
    class Prop,
     with name 'other' 'side',
          description "The houses on the other side of the street are much like yours: two stories, made of wood, covered with snow. It seems that your neighbours are sleeping, as no light shines from their windows.",
      has ;
      
   Object straat "street" tuin
    class Prop,
     with name 'street' 'road' 'sludge',
          description "The streets are full of the dirty brown sludge that remains when feet and cartwheels mix snow with mud.",
	  before [;
	    Cross: "You don't have to cross the road.";
	  ],
      has ;
      
   Object huis "your house" tuin
    class Prop,
     with pname 'house' 'my',
          description "Your house is, like almost every house in the village, built from wood and has been painted in white, yellow and red. It has two stories: the bedrooms are on the top story, the living room and the kitchen on the bottom one. You glance through the window of your bedroom, but Hilde does not appear to wave you goodbye.",
	  before [;
	    Enter, Go, GoIn: <<Enter tuindeur>>;
	  ],
      has proper;
      
Object tuindeur "door"
  with pname '.x' 'yellow' 'door' '.p' 'inside' '.p' 'in' '.p' 'front' '.p' 'landing' '.p' 'upstairs' '.p' 'corridor',
       description "Last summer, you painted the front door in a hard yellow.",
       found_in tuin,
       door_dir u_to,
       door_to overloop,
       react_before [;
         Climb, Go, GoIn, Enter: if (noun == self || noun == u_obj || noun == overloop || noun == n_obj || noun == in_obj) {
	     if(TuinNaarTrap() == true) return true;
	   };
	 
       ],
   has door scenery open openable;
   
   
Object brievenbus "letterbox" tuin
 class Furniture, 
  with name 'letterbox' 'mailbox' 'box',
       description "A small letterbox hangs on the outside of the garden fence.",
       before [;
         Insert: if(second == self) {
	            if (noun == axe || noun == beer || noun == kleding) {
		      "That doesn't fit in the letterbox.";
		    };  
		  };
       ],
   has openable ~open container;
   
   Object baron_brief "letter from the baron" brievenbus
     with pname 'letter' '.p' 'letter' 'from' 'the' 'baron' '.p' 'parchment' '.p' 'signature',
          description [;
	  print "In elegant handwriting, a message has been written on the parchment:^^";
	  style bold;
	  print "To Maartje's parents,^
	  ^
	  With this letter I want to tell you that your daughter Maartje has been taken from your home and brought to my castle at my command. Do not worry: she is safe here and is well taken care of. Do not try to visit Maartje or take her away from me; my castle is heavily guarded and you would only risk your own well-being.^
	  ^
	  I understand that it must be difficult for you to loose your daughter, and I apologise for your suffering. You wonder what my motives are. Well, I love her, and I cannot live without Maartje at my side. With me she will be happy, I promise that on my honour and my hope of salvation. Someday you will understand that this is the best possible situation.^
	  ^
	  The baron.^^";
	  style roman;
	  "Trembling with anger you stare at the signature at the bottom of the page.";
	  ],
	  before [;
	    Consult: <<Examine self>>;
	    Attack: 
	      move snippers to parent(baron_brief);
	      remove baron_brief;
	      "In a fit of rage you tear the letter apart in dozens of shreds. How dares he! ~I love her,~ he writes - sure! The heartless villain...";
	     Burn:
	      if(TestScope(toorts, player)) {
	       if(second == toorts || second == nothing) {
	         if(toorts has general) {
		   remove self;
		   "That feels good! You incinerate the baron's lies, that you will never have to read them again.";
		 } else {
		   "Now that the torch has gone out, it can't set anything on fire.";
		 }
	       } else {
	         "You can't use that to make a fire.";
	       }
	      }	     
	  ],
      has male;
      
   Object snippers "shreds" baron_brief
    with name 'shreds' 'shred',
         description "These shreds are all that remains of the horrible letter from the baron.",
	 before [;
	    Eat: if(actor == player && noun == self) { 
	       print "You put the shreds into your mouth, mash them to a pulp and then swallow every memory of the infamous letter.^";
	       remove self;
	       return true;
	       };
	    Burn:
	      if(TestScope(toorts, player)) {
	       if(second == toorts || second == nothing) {
	         if(toorts has general) {
		   remove self;
		   "You sprinkle the little shreds of paper into the flame of the torch; as a flight of foolish moths they are set ablaze, flutter downwards and are utterly consumed before they ever reach the ground.";
		 } else {
		   "Now that the torch has gone out, it can't set anything on fire.";
		 }
	       } else {
	         "You can't use that to make a fire.";
	       }
	      }
	  ],
     has pluralname;
   
Object axe "axe" tuin
  with name 'axe',
       description [;
         if(baron.state == 1 || baron.state == 2)
	   "This is your most important tool. Without doubt you have felled thousands of trees with it. The axe is well-honed, has a good balance, and with your muscles the weight is no problem at all. You will probably be able to cleave the baron's head in one blow.";
	 "This is your most important tool. Without doubt you have felled thousands of trees with it. The axe is well-honed, has a good balance, and with your muscles the weight is no problem at all.";   
       ],
       before [;
       	     Burn: "The axe won't burn; the wood of the handle is much too tough and hard.";
       ],
   has male;